Now compare it to this revised version: "Because half of American elementary school children consume nine times the daily allowance of sugar, schools should replace soda machine beverages with healthy alternatives." The revised thesis specifies who (elementary school children), what the problem is (excessive sugar consumption), and what action is needed (replace soda machine beverages)
After enlisting on October 11, 1859, Wall, a native of England, served on the USS Connecticut until his discharge at the Marine Barracks in Brooklyn on October 15, 1863, at the expiration of his term
Many products have high levels of THC, which can worsen symptoms, he said
Cigarette boxes are the single packs you see at gas stations or convenience stores
I was having a melt down and in the last 2 weeks as each day passed, but Hypo symptoms have started raging one by one and are worse everyday